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I really do not want to sound like the old man ogre swatting at a young new writer. Yet reviews ought to be honest.
From the beginning, this feels choppy, unrefined. The premise, that "a young woman walked from tennis practice into the dark woods, found a primal lover, fucked him and thus missed her blind date" was strained.
I couldn't shake the feeling this was cut and paste from other works, but I hope I am deeply wrong on this. With some rewrites with attention to flow, descriptions and continuity this story would be better.
My best advice would be to read, read, and read more. Develop a feel for how the best stories flow, how the characters are developed and how the actions are described. The best writers read much more than they ever would write.
